I have just made up my poem for my grandad can you tell me what you think?

Very beautifully written. I think that it's great that you are able to use poetry to express yourself and put your feelings on paper. I'll bet this really helps you through the grieving process. I'm sure your grandad would really appreciate it too. Just one comment to the person who suggested some changes. I wouldn't change a thing! You are bringing your own experiences, pain, and thoughts to this poem. I is an expression of self. Be proud of what you've written.